Mistranslation
notable
JA p.11
JA始まりの余熱
ENTHE WASTE HEAT OF THE BEGINNING
Lit.THE REMAINING HEAT OF THE BEGINNING
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Prologue (The Waste Heat of the Beginning)プロローグ 『始まりの余熱』
Prologue (The Waste Heat of the Beginning)
プロローグ 『始まりの余熱』
Tone & register
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JA p.11
JA固い地べたの感触を顔面に味わい、彼は自分がうつ伏せに倒れたのだと気付いた。
ENFeeling the hard texture of the ground against his face, he realized that he had fallen facedown on the ground.
Lit.As he tasted the feeling of the bare earth, he realized he was lying facedown on it.
Not much to note here, but the literal translation has less repetition and flows a bit better.
Addition
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JA p.11
JA全身に力が入らず、手先の感覚はすでにない。
ENHe couldn't move, even when he tried, and he already couldn't feel his fingers
Lit.He couldn't exert any strength, and already couldn't feel his fingers
This is mostly semantics, but still worth noting.
Localization
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JA p.11
JAせき込み、喉からこみ上げる命の源を思う様に吐き出す。
ENHe coughed and vomited the blood he felt rising in his throat — the source of his waning life.
Lit.Coughing violently, he spit out the blood which was the origin of life to his heart's content.
This sentence is really awkward when translated directly, but the localization neglects that Subaru is almost taking pleasure in spitting out this blood despite it being "the source" of his life. Interesting contrast is being skipped here in other words.
"余熱" implies that this heat is the last embers of life of Subaru's life, and does not imply that this heat is wasted.